Friday, March 25, 2011

Section 3-Kristin Chai(01)

What are your thoughts and feelings about being depression, loneliness, heartbreaks, being different from your peers, and having to put up a front? How do/would you deal with some of these issues.

I feel that it is a very painful process as when we feel depressed,its like no one can feel what we are feeling just like heartbreaks,loneliness unless they have experienced it. Having to put up a front is very bad as we have to control our emotions if we leak out our emotions,our friends will know and we will have to go through pain in telling what happened to us. I may ask for help from friends,talk about it hope they can help me feel better and forget what had happened to me.

1 comment:

  1. Structure: There is a short introduction and body. But there is not really a conclusion.
    Thesis Statement/ Topic sentences: There a few topic sentences but they are all linked together.
    Shared thoughts and feelings: There is shared thoughts and feelings as she described how does it feel to be depressed, lonely ,having heartbreaks.
    Dealt with the issues: Since there is a shared thought of the feeling, there is also solutions for it.
    Give reasons why you chose methods: Her reasons should be like sometimes, things might be a disaster.
    Reasons sound? It is sound as she thinks before acting, and confides in to someone she trusts.